The Lonely Hearts Bar

Konni Granma โ˜…

Early morning in Los Angeles. There's nothing like it! Here the sun is only stirring, but somewhere faraway the moon has already risen. 

 ๐“˜ ๐”€๐“ช๐“ผ ๐“ฐ๐“ฒ๐“ฟ๐“ฎ๐“ท ๐“ช ๐“ฏ๐“ป๐“ฎ๐“ฎ ๐“ฌ๐“ธ๐“น๐”‚ ๐“ธ๐“ฏ ๐“ฝ๐“ฑ๐“ฎ ๐“ท๐“ธ๐“ฟ๐“ฎ๐“ต ๐“ฃ๐“ฑ๐“ฎ ๐“›๐“ธ๐“ท๐“ฎ๐“ต๐”‚ ๐“—๐“ฎ๐“ช๐“ป๐“ฝ๐“ผ ๐“‘๐“ช๐“ป ๐“ฒ๐“ท ๐“ฎ๐”๐“ฌ๐“ฑ๐“ช๐“ท๐“ฐ๐“ฎ ๐“ฏ๐“ธ๐“ป ๐“ช๐“ท ๐“ฑ๐“ธ๐“ท๐“ฎ๐“ผ๐“ฝ ๐“ป๐“ฎ๐“ฟ๐“ฒ๐“ฎ๐”€. 

Ah, where to begin with this novel?

The Lonely Hearts Bar features the story of Connie and her friends in Los Angeles as they struggle with college, friendship and romance, drugs, and the film world. Connie aspires to become a screenplay writer and director and ambitiously crafts her own writing with inspiration from her life. 

Why did this novel only achieve one star?

Personally, I didn't find this novel to my taste. While the storyline is fast paced, the characters didn't interest me and I found them to be dull. Connie's character lacks personality and I wasn't appealed by her story. Also, Connie's friends didn't intrigue my reading. They portray characteristics I've read about tons of times before and lack originality to inspire and engage the reader.

Additionally, this novel contains lots of grammatical mistakes, which are noticeable on the pages and often make the writing troublesome to read. The narration jumps from past to present, and vice versa, constantly throughout the novel, and occasionally Connie asks questions from the reader, which seem out of place. For example, while enjoying a dessert, a paragraph is directed at the reader: 

"Have you ever tasted hot blueberry pie soaked in vanilla ice cream while listening to Norah Jones? If not, then you're really missing out: it's magical!..."

I found these comments irrelevant and awkward.

Another major limitation of this novel is that there are tons of pointless and unnecessary scenes and dialogue. I could've scrapped half of the novel and the main plot line would have remained the same. Also, I thought the dialogue of the characters was too clichรฉd and irksome. For instance, the reader is presented the classic "you are different from others" speech from the romance interest: 

"I swear! Even the scene you chose... it, like, proved you were some- how... different."

This, among others, caused me to lose interest in the novel.

I think this novel could have achieved more stars if it would have explored fewer characters in more depth and cut out the unnecessary scenes. For instance, Connie's teacher, Mr. BB, presents an interesting backstory, and I wish the novel would have chosen to focus more on his conflicts and life. 

All in all, I didn't find this novel to my taste, but if you're interested in screenwriting and the film industry, I would recommend checking it out. Maybe you'll enjoy it more than me?